Post by Mr. McGuire on Feb 7, 2014 13:56:57 GMT -5
How could you make the book better? Describe changes the author could have included that would have made the book more exciting and interesting. Please use specific details from the book to help explain changes you would make.
The book I am reading is "City of Ashes," and I think I could make it better by changing the fact that Jace and Clary(main characters) turn out to be brother and sister. I think it should be changed because I thought they were meant to be together and be each others true love!I also think that Valentine(the worst demon-Demon Ruler), shouldn't be their father because that kind of makes them demons in a way. I think should be changed because I hate Valentine and that it is so weird for a demon-ruler to be Clary and Jaces(demon-hunters) father. I think a lot of people would agree with me that they should be together and that Valentine isn't their father, but it may be a good thing their brother and sister, and that he is their father, but I would want to change those things because it would make the book better in my eyes!
"Describe changes the author make to City of Ashes that would have made the book more exciting and interesting?"
I think that if they made Jace and Clary boyfriend and girlfriend, the book would be more exciting because it would kind of bring out a good part in the demon hunting thing. I also think that it would be a more interesting for them to find out that he is not their father, and they have to fight him. It may be a good thing that things are happening like this, but I don't think it's exciting or interesting that these things are happening in the book because it is actually hurting Jace and Clary because bad stuff keep happening now that they know the truth!
I really hope at the end of this series (in "City of Lost Souls"), that they find out that they can be together and that Valentine is not their father. I will be so happy because I think that if Valentine is their birth-father, then they will never be able to be each others true love, and they will always have demon blood in their souls! I will probably be so sad/mad if the book stays like this because I never thought the series would be like this, but that's what books are about, SUPRISES and that's why I like them.
The series is called "The Mortal Instruments" by Cassandra Clare! Hope you read it and find it really joyful!!
The book I am reading is First Love by James Patterson I could make this book better by I would make them fall in love faster it felt like forever for them to fall in love. Well when they ran away they stole lots of cars I think that I would like it if they only stole like 1 or 2 I don't know how many they stole but it seemed like a lot. I something I want to change is his name I don't like Robinson it does not seem like a bad boy name it sounds like sweet boy. I think that Axi name well her full name is Alexandra and I think they should just call her Alex I don't even know how to say that name. I don't know many changes I could of made to this there are few I would make to make the book better I liked the book a lot so there is not much I want to change. That is what I do to my book to make it better.
I'm reading Watcher in the Woods by Robert Liparulo and something that could make it better is that the family could have gone into the WW2 world together and that means that somebody in the family would be very close to dying and they could cover more ground in that world. When David was running from the Nazi tank the family could be running away from the tank. then when the little girl and her mother were running away and the mother dies. I want the mother to live and have the family save them from being run over by the tank That is all I want to change about the book because the book is really good so far.
I'm reading Timescape by Robert Liparulo. How could I make Timescape a better, more interesting book? Well in the last chapter they found a bear saying Toria up stairs, in their Moms voice. Thinking it would be their Mom, they went up the stairs running at full speed screming Mom are you there? There was no Mom. They thought it was going to be their Mom coming back trying to find them. It was just that bear saying it in her voice.
I could make this part better by someone actually putting the bear down to set them up. So when they would go up there thing it was their mom, they would be mistaken. Then they would try and fight who ever it was, trying to get that person to say Were is their mom was? Is she ok? Is she safe? Did you take her? If they put this part in the book it would be exciting, thrilling and even more action!
In Trackers the Shantorian I would include whose all involved and how do they come up with the missions. They always have a mission but never tell how they came up with it. If the author put in how they came up with missions and how there doing it, it would make the book more exiting and better. Cause people want to know why they go on missions and if people don't understand they will stop reading the book and people wont tell anyone about it.
My book is Night Rise by Anthony Horowitz, One thing that I could do to change the story and make it better is in the book Jamie and Scott get separated. Jamie is looking for Scott and thinks he knows where Scott is so they make up a fake criminal record to send him to a correctional facility. That place is more than just a correctional facility. Night Rise owns it and at the time that's where Scott is being held.
How and what I would do to change it is have Jamie and Scott, the main characters. Get trapped in a tiny war. What I would do is make it look like Scott has ran away and escaped the Night Rise Corporation. But its a trap and the people with Jamie suspect so. They go there with a few armed people with knives, swords, and spears. They go to Jamie and tell him they think its a trap but still Jamie go's to Scott and they were right it was a trap immediately gunshots were spraying everywhere. They start having a small war and they get Scott and he fights beside his brother and they defeat the Night Rise Corporation and stop they old ones from growing stronger. Then they go and take out the old ones and send them back to where they came from. That's what I would change the the book to make it better.
In Mocking Jay Peeta and Katniss end up together. I would like to make the book better by Susanne Collins telling me if they got married, or how Gale ended up. If she would include those details then it would make the story better by having more details and having a better ending.
Post by Mckenzie S. on Mar 3, 2014 10:43:29 GMT -5
I am now reading Plunked. In the book, Jack is in left field. He is an OK player, but he is no a Joey Votto. If I was the author I would make Jack an awful player who in a game catches a line drive and gets out a player at second base.
OK, this is how it would go...
It is the 6th inning, the score is 13 to 12. ( Jacks team is winning. )All the starting players are back in the game. Jack is at left field, and the pitcher throws a curve ball. STRIKE 1. Yells the ump. Then the pitcher thinks for a second. And all of the sudden he throws a knuckle ball. STRIKE 2. The ump yells again. 2-0 says the ump. The pitcher is waiting the crowd is silent. Then..... He throws a fast ball. Then you hear a Ching. And the crowd roars. The ball is going, going and it's gone!!!! Wait, where is the ball? Says the broad casters. Then Jack raises his glove. The ball is tucked in side against the glove net. The crowd is roaring the benches are thumping.
Jack! Jack! Jack! Yells his team with joy. Coach walks over to him and pats him on the back. Now I think we can all agree that the MVP here is Jack. Congratulations Jack. If you would have dropped that ball, they would've scored and it would be tied.
And that is how the book would change if I was the author.
Hideout is a place for dogs to escape from swindle.
When Griffin Bing and his 4 friends first met Luthor (the dog), he was a amazing attack dog working for the slimy S. Wendell Palomino also known as Swindle. The kids rescued Luthor and never thought they'd see Swindle again.
But now Swindle's returned. And he wants his dog back.
Swindle has made the law so that there's no way for them to keep Luthor in there house. Before he can be taken away, the kids decide to make him disappear away from Swindle.
I think the book could of been better if they didn't go to the second hideout. I think that they could of just keep running into different places instead of staying at one in till swindle finds the hideout. They could of went farther and farther away from him in stead of staying in one place in till he finds them.
The book I am reading is called Confectionatelly Yours Save The Cupcake.
What I would change is that Hayley's best friend Artemis should still be called her nickname which she had since she was in kindergarten which is Artie. I would also change that during the PTO meeting that Hayley and her friend Megan won because the PTO wanted to ban cupcakes from their school.
By making these changes they would be able to keep on selling cupcakes because they show school sprit. That is it for today thanks for reading Bye-Bye.
Hello and today I am going to talk about how I could make the book that I am reading a better and more interesting book!
I'm reading Divergent, by Veronica Roth and I would make the book better by on the part when Peter, Molly, and Drew are laughing at Tris when she walks out of the bathroom with her towel on and Tris just ignores them and walks to her bunk getting out her dress that Christina made her get and Peter came up right behind Tris and was saying rude things to her and instead of her not doing anything and pretending that they were not there I would have made this part better if Tris would of stood up for herself and would of been rude right back to them. I would also make the part better if Christina was in the dormitory with Tris and Christina helped Tris stand up for herself and they would of all got into a big fight in the dormitory room!
Those are just a couple of changes that I would of had made in that part. I hope you enjoyed!
The book I'm reading is......The Clue In The Diary by Carolyn Keene.
How I could make the book better is........Adding more fires and robs cause that's what this book is all about. Nancy is trying to fine the person who started the fire at the Raybolts home. She is trying to get Honey's farther out of jail because everyone thinks that he did it but clues are adding up that he's not the one who started the Raybolts house fire. This is where my idea comes. Nancy thinks that Mr.Raybolt started the fire but shes not sure yet. So I think that he should start another fire so that everyone gets thinking that Honey's father still the one who did it but he had planed the hole thing out before he got sent to jail. Nancy on the other hand believes that Honeys father was telling the truth about what had happened at the scene of the fire. So when that other fire starts she gets really really good hints that Mr. Raybolt is the one who is the cause of all this and that Mrs.Raybolt is behind this who thing to.
Changes that the author could have made that would have made the book better is......... She could have put Nancy and her two friends in jail with Honeys father and they only got to make one call and they all decide that she should call the house keeper Hannah, to tell her that they needed Mr.Drew Nancy's dad for lawyer things. When they had the hopes up high they drop down low cause, she says that Mr.Drew won't be home tell later tonight but when he gets home she will tell him the news but he probably won't get there tell tomorrow so you won't be able to come home tonight. Unless you want me to come get you guys and then tomorrow he can go and work everything out with the people there. When she said that there hopes went so high that they almost burst out of their body.
That's the changes that I think should happen to the book.
Right now I am reading The Kill Order by James Dashner. In the beginging the Toad, Misty and Darnell died. Right now in my book Mark and Alec are investigating a place called the berg headquarters where they believe the people who came in and killed almost everybody in their villiage is. They are also looking for their friends Lana, Trina and Deedee who went missing. I think it would have been really cool if the Toad, Misty and Darnell would have been a part of that. I feel I didn't get to konw them very well before they died!!
Another change the author could have made to make the book more exciting was instead of the berg coming in and almost killing everybody in their villiage the berg could have came to rescue them ( so they think) and they could have started a new adventure!!!! I think that would have been really cool because it would have added more suspense to the story!!!!
Those were some of the changes that the author could have made to to the story to make it better!!!
Today I will be writing about how I would make my book better. Hope you enjoy! The book I'm reading is Harry Potter And The Sorcerer Stone. What has recently happens was Hagrid and Harry had to go shopping for clothing, wands, spell books, etc. Hagrid told Harry that his parents had money in a bank for himso he could go to Hogwarts. When they went to the bank Goblins were protecting the bank and they were almost a head smaller than Harry. I think it would be more exciting and scary if something bigger and scarier was protecting the bank(like dragons or trolls). That's how I would change Harry Potter And The Sorcerer Stone to make it more it interesting.