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Post by Logan C on Mar 3, 2014 13:21:58 GMT -5
Hi, I am reading the book watcher in the woods by Robert Liparulo. Something that I could have done to made the book better is have a another troll creature to come and kidnap another character. So that they could find the first character that got kidnapped then they'd have to find the other character too. That is all I would change because the is so good
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Post by Wyatt on Mar 3, 2014 13:25:03 GMT -5
I am reading Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban. I think the book is good the way it is. The author (J. K. Rowling) could have changed to make the book more interesting is when Harry finds out that black is the dog he should have just killed him.
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Post by Sydney R. on Mar 3, 2014 13:25:33 GMT -5
Well I just started reading The City of Bones so there's really nothing that I can decide what to change just yet. Since I can't really say anything about that book I'm going to talk about Allegiant. What I could change in the book to make it better and not so sad is instead of Tris sacrificing herself instead of Caleb and leaving the world for him after what he did I think it would of been better if he sacrificed himself instead of her. I also think because of Tris's death I think the book would be better if Tobais didn't zip line with Tris's urn it would of been better if Tobais zip lined with Tris. Veronica Roth did an amazing job writing the Divergent series but those are some changes that I would make with the book Allegiant.
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Post by Abigail H. on Mar 3, 2014 13:49:48 GMT -5
How I could make Watcher in the Woods by Robert Liparulo a better book? Well that's kinda hard but I quess what I change is that when Taksidian(Jim) came to their house during dinner that he would of stayed longer! I wanted him to talk to Toria and Xander! I wanted to know more about him! I mean if someone just showed up at your doorway at night while eating dinner, would you want to know who it really is? I was just really curious about him! Also I wish Xander would go threw more worlds! I think it's really interesting how he describes all the different worlds and places! I would be even better with more! And for David too! Well thats what I think would make Watcher in the Woods a little better!
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Post by Hannah on Mar 3, 2014 13:56:47 GMT -5
In the book I'm reading The Eleventh Plague I could make the book better by making Stephen understand why Jenny refuses to know the way things are and the way things work. I would put another character in the book but I would make the chat water Jenny's older brother but only a year older to where he knows everything that has happened in her life. So that eat the two boys are protecting Jenny and so the brother can tell Stephen why jenny is acting the way she is. Another thing I would do is change that way that Stephen only knows his like as a salvager. The author could of made the book more interesting by when Stephen meets Jenny. Make Jenny hurt to where they have to be careful and help each other and don't someone or something that can help whatever is wrong with Jenny. I think that if the author made Jenny hurt it would make the book seem more like they are trying so hard for each other to help each other and be a team. To get somewhere where they could all just relax and get the help that they need from all the things they went through.
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Post by Brendan on Mar 3, 2014 14:08:40 GMT -5
The book I am reading is called Watchers War. The main characters name is Jake. I think the story would have been better and more interesting if Jake's unit had sneaked up on the rebels. Instead the rebels snicked up on Jake's unit. The story could have been more interesting because then there would have been more action there may even have been a battle. Then Jake could really know what the civil war was like and possibly could find out who,s uniform is in the attic. I think there isn't much to change. For a good read I suggest this book Watchers War.
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Post by Alexis on Mar 3, 2014 14:10:13 GMT -5
The book I'm reading is Insurgent by Veronica Roth. In this book, Tris' friend Marlene dies from a simulation attack by the Erudite. The Erudite leader, Jeanine Mathews put three people under the simulation, Marlene, Tris' other friend Hector, and a little girl from the Dauntless compound. Tris saved Hector from jumping off the roof by grabbing his shirt before he fell. The little girl got hurt when she jumped off but she ended up being okay. Marlene was the only one who died.
A change I would make to this situation in the book is, to let Marlene live. The only way Hector was still alive was because Tris caught him before he fell off of the roof. I would have Tris grab both Marlene and Hector before they fell, so neither of them would fall. If Tris wouldn't be able to hold them both I would have Tris' friend Christina, (who was with her when Marlene died) grab Marlene before she fell.
I think this change would make the book more interesting because Marlene was very brave, and a good fighter which made her a really good Dauntless. If Marlene were still alive, I think she would be able to help Tris, and the rest of the Dauntless who weren't traitors stay away from Erudite and try to stay safe from the simulations. Although Marlene liked to mess around, she was also smart with knowing what to do. She would know where to go to keep the Dauntless away from the Erudite.
This is a change I would make to make the story better. I think if Marlene were still alive, she would be able to help the Dauntless a lot. I hope you enjoyed!
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Post by Taryn on Mar 3, 2014 14:21:08 GMT -5
The book I'm reading is Storm Warning: Dogs of The Drowned City. It's about a hurricane that comes to a city and forces all the people in the city to leave. But their are no dogs allowed.The main character in the book is Shep, a Germain Shepherd.When he eats all the food his boy left him, he brakes out of the house and searches for food. He meets other dogs along the way.I think that when they rescue the other the other dogs,they should form a pack to help fight against the wild dogs instead of everyone fighting and not listening to Shep. That's what I think should change in the story.
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Post by Brianna on Mar 3, 2014 14:37:15 GMT -5
Today I am supposed to write about how could I make the book better? Describe changes the author could have included that would have made the book more exciting and interesting. Please use specific details from the book to help explain changes you would make.
I am reading The Ether Vero Rising. The Ether Vero Rising is about The Ether. The Ether is a place in the clear sky; the upper regions of air beyond the clouds. There is a boy named Vero Leland. He was always suspected he was different from others his own age, ever since his childhood attempts to fly. But he never could have predicted the truth or how much his life was about to change. Soon after his twelfth birthday, Vero learns he is a guardian angel and is abruptly transported to the Ether, the spiritual realm that surrounds the...
I think that I could make the book better by putting my friends in the book, but to still have Vero in the book because then the book wouldn't be the same. I could put in my own touch. Maybe I could added more pizzazz, more funny parts to the book. Like if the author would use opinion it would go something like this. Vero could had almost die more than 7 times and he get hurt but he laughs and laughs. Then in the end he get something and tries to do something and he fails. Sorry I can't tell you so I am using something.
I think that the author could have included more exciting and interesting by having more people, more sad parts. Then you would want to read on to knows what happened. Or the author could have more exciting parts like someone or something accomplish something like a goal.
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Post by Zane on Mar 3, 2014 14:56:33 GMT -5
Hi,today I'm going to talk about how I would make my book better. My book is Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix. Recently Harry and well the whole school has gotten a new Defense Against the dark arts teacher. Everybody hates Professor Umbridge because she doesn't let them use any spells. She doesn't think there is a need to teach them any spells because Professor Umbridge doesn't think there is anything to use the spells on. Not everybody thinks she is lying, but some people think that there is something or someone to use them on. You see Harry went to this graveyard in the last book [not intentionally] but when he went there a sort of ceremony happened to bring back the dark lord. When he is revived he tries to kill Harry. Voldemort didn't succeed in killing harry but when Harry makes it back to Hogwarts he tells everybody that Voldemort is back. Most people don't believe he is back because the ministry of magic says he is not back. So back to this book Professor Umbridge doesn't teach spells because she is in the ministry and doesn't believe Harry.
What I would change is for the Professor to be the only one to believe Harry in the ministry of magic. But she wouldn't tell anybody. So when she is teaching she would teach them powerful spells to attack and defend themselves. They might not be able to stand up to Voldemort himself but to his army.
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Post by Cassie on Mar 3, 2014 15:09:17 GMT -5
The book I'm reading is Variant if the author Robison Wells made a few people in every gang change to a new gang it would make the book better. Dont get me wrong the book is really good without that change but it would be way better with it. In Variant a boy named Benson gots a scholarship too maxfield where there are no teachers or parent just the students. The student formed three gangs the V's, Havoc' and the society. The V's is what beson is in all this group wants to do is get out. The havoc want to live with no rules and the society wants to follow all the rules.
I think it would make the book so much better if like five of the society people were forced to join the havoc gang. The havoc gangs five people should have to join the V's and the V's should have to join the society. That way they would all not be able to trust anyone. Anyone could really not want to be in that gang and like manipulate the other gang members so they would trust them. Then they can use the information the people who actually care got to do whatever they want.
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Post by Luke S. on Mar 3, 2014 16:26:00 GMT -5
Hello,today I will be talking about what changes I would make to make the book Skeleton Creek by Patrick Carman even more greater then what it is ( by the way it is going to be hard). So with out further ado lets get in to it.
So the thing that I would change is the details because you have to pin point the consideration because if you don't get the first paragraph you won't get to book at all so I would make it to where everyone can get the main idea or the theme of the book because you can take it one way or the other way.
So that is what I would change this post wasn't to hard to understand what I was trying to get to you guys. I just hope you guys got what I was trying to say about this book it is just so mesmerizing. So hope you guys enjoyed this blog post and I hope you stay tuned for my next post. BYE BYE
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Post by Cade on Mar 3, 2014 17:42:08 GMT -5
I am reading The Watchers War. Something that I would have done is give more detail on someone named Kozaar. All you now about him is that he is a movie directer and he sounds really shady because now one has hers form him and the bam he put out a big movie.
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Post by Lance on Mar 3, 2014 17:51:07 GMT -5
I'm reading Stung.If I could change my book I would explain the book better in the beginning I didn't get it much. But since I've read it I get now I started to get around chapter 5.I would also change it to where the book would explain it earlier on what it means when it says that she's a level ten.I would make when she's down in the sewers the man that tried to kill her knocked her out in when she woke up she would be in side the wall.
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Post by Marcus on Mar 3, 2014 17:53:52 GMT -5
If I changed any thing in Divergent it would be the part when Tris and Four are climbing up a cliff side and then Tris starts to lose her grip and then she closes her eyes and calls out for Four and then he randomly gets down then gets in a car and she falls and lands on the bed of the car. I would've made it so when she started to fall Four would've swung over and grabbed her hand and pulled her to safety and then got down to the ground.
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