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Post by Tatum on Mar 3, 2014 21:22:36 GMT -5
How could you make the book better? Describe changes the author could have included that would have made the book more exciting and interesting. Please use specific details from the book to help explain changes you would make.
The book I am reading is The Westing Game. The author is Ellen Raskin. Well I am supposed to write about how I could make the book better and describe changes the author could have included in the book that would have made the book more interesting and exciting.
Right now in the book there is this house where this guy named Sam Westing supposedly dies in. After he dies some of the people that live Sunset Towers have a meeting to read his will. After the reading of is will they figure out that Sam Westing wants them to play the Westing game.
I think I could make the book better by changing the setting of the story. Right now in the story the setting is in a hotel or apartments all together in one building. I think the setting should be in Sam Westing's house because to me that would make the story very interesting. Since they are playing the Westing game, which means there are teams of two people and each team have clues and the object of the game is to win and find the murder of Sam Westing. I think the setting being in the Westing house would make the story be more interesting because the teams would actually have Sam Westing's house to help them figure more about what the clues they have mean. I also think it would be more interesting if the setting was changed in the Westing house because in the story it says Sam Westing was murdered by one of the members playing the Westing game. So I think that if the setting was in the Westing house the murder would feel really guilty about killing Sam Westing because I think that actually being in the house where you killed a person would make you want to confess about what you have done.
I also think that the author could have made some changes to the book to make it better and more interesting. One change I think the author could have made was to tell the book in first person. I think that if the author told the book in first person it would make the book way more interesting and exciting because you would be wandering who the first person was or the author was. So in the book right now it is told in third person, not in first person. I think that if the author told the book in first person at the end she should say who he/she is, which I think should be Sam Westing.
In the book I am reading I think that the author could have definitely made some changes to the book, it is still a good book though. If I could change the book to make it more interesting I would change the setting. If the author could change some of the book I think she should have changed the book from third person to first person. I would make changes to the book.
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Post by bens3333 on Mar 3, 2014 21:28:30 GMT -5
Im reading watchers Island I think the book would be better if the girl found her family because the girl and the boy jumped off the cruise to swim and this thing came in the water and took the girl to this place. Also I think the book would be better if the that found the girl would be bad people so the girl would have to escape Buts that what I say I dont like how they treat the girl all nice it would be amazing if the girl was about to get off the island and they take the girl hostile.
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Luke L.
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Post by Luke L. on Mar 3, 2014 21:30:34 GMT -5
I am reading I.Q. White House by Roland Smith I could make the book better because there could be change the action like I would say people like right beside them trying to take them. In the White House not really many people can take them because there is so much security. There is so much security that there is more of them then there is cook's and other people.
The author could change the action because he really doesn't make it interesting like if I made some changes a lot more people would read the book I'm not saying that not many people do I bet a lot of people do like I love the book but make a change and it would be good. These kinds of books can get a lot of people's attention because they are so good make a small change and people would read it twice a day. I recommend this book because of its great telling of history.
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Post by Emma R on Mar 3, 2014 22:28:58 GMT -5
How could you make the book better? Describe changes the author could have included that would have made the book more exciting and interesting. Please use specific details from the book to help explain changes you would make.
In the book that I am reading, Sisters Grimm: Once Upon A Crime, the girls have been working on a mystery about the death of their half brother, Puck's, father. They have a suspect and they have found him. Right when they get to him, he gets away. They have to tell Puck's mother that he got away and she gets mad very easily. She is very upset and sad.
It was a little bit disappointing to me because I was really hoping they would catch the bad guy quick. They go on and on and on about trying to find him, but they always choose the wrong way to go. The girls always suspect the wrong person. They never suspect the bad guy is the person who they trust the most.
Sabrina, Daphne, Granny Relda, Moth, and Puck's smelly cocoon were in the city of New York, at the sight seer, Mr. Scrooge's office. They find out who actually killed Puck's dad. They suspect he was probably working alone. They find he is hiding with somebody and she happens to be a fairy godmother. They find him, yet he gets away because they didn't plan what they would do when they got there.
If I could change the book, I would give them more of a chance to get to the bad guy. I would make them catch him and change the story by letting the girls bring justice to the death of their brother's father. I would give the story a happy ending.
This is what I would've done to make the story better. Thanks for reading!
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Post by Skylar on Mar 3, 2014 22:42:21 GMT -5
Well my book is Brian's Winter By Gary Paulsen. He tells a lot like what he doe's every minute and what kind of place he is in. I would personally go back and remind the people what has happened in the past. What he is wearing and what he looks like. He should because some people haven't read the book Hatchet. Because the climax of that book is amazing. I was surprised he lived because of what did happen. He has the winter witch is very bad for him. All the animals he meets. Some of the animals he encounters. I want to know how his clothes look because he has been there for ever and how he got there is the bad part. So that's how I would do it. Plus make those changes.
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Post by Tyler P. on Mar 4, 2014 14:40:17 GMT -5
The book I am reading is "Middle School The Worst Years Of My Life" Its about a kid named Rafe. He wants to be the first person to break every rule in his schools rule book.
One way I could make the book better would be to add a list of all the rules in the book so the readers know what the rules he needs to break are.
Some changes the author could have included that would have made the book more exciting and more interesting would be to explain why Rafe wants to the first break all the rules. also he could tell the punishments of all the rules. If these changes are made then this book will be even better than it is now.
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Post by nazishs3333 on Mar 4, 2014 16:15:21 GMT -5
How I would make the book Things Not Seen better. I would have made the book better by not letting Bobby's parents get into an accident, because when Bobby's parents got into an accident Bobby had a hard time at home by not keeping his room, kitchen, or anything clean. If Bobby's parents didn't have an accident the teachers and police wouldn't be worried about Bobby.
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Post by parkers3333 on Mar 4, 2014 19:59:41 GMT -5
The book was very good and interesting! The part were Ryan almost died and he was trapped in his own house and could not trust anyone not even his self. The author could have put in more details to make the book more interesting. He was forbidden from seeing his best friend Sarah. She takes videos of what she finds then she sents the link to Ryan so we can see what is going on.
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Post by leah on Mar 5, 2014 8:28:26 GMT -5
The book I am reading is Whats Left Of Me and I think I could make my book better by finding out out why each person in my book must fade from there sibling because I think that is a big event in my book and if I found that out it would help me get the book more so I can grow to like the book.I think the author in the book could have added more details to the beginning to explain about were the characters are at and how they got there,I also think the author could have explained more about why everybody must fade or bad things will happen.
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Post by Jackie on Mar 5, 2014 11:28:31 GMT -5
How can I make The Clique books better? Hmm.....
Well I don't think you can make The Clique books any better. Because...A Spoiled rich girl, Massie gets a literal wake up call when her dad announces that their guest house will be occupied by his college buddy and his family. This family includes a daughter named Claire, who is the same age as Massie. Massie, the head of a seventh grade clique called The Pretty Committee(At OCD Middle School), does not like this newcomer at all. A rivalry between the two girls begins. Okay, so the girls from the Pretty Committee may be hard to relate with, but once you're IN you're IN. So I do not think that I should change the book, the Author(Lisi Harrison) wrote the books so we can enjoy them I think if I change the book then I'm basically changing her motive and her story and I do NAWT think that is wright.....
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Post by Griffin on Mar 5, 2014 15:22:47 GMT -5
I could of made the book better by having the main character go to the NFL. If I was the writer I probably would of just picked some NFL team that he would get drafted to. I feel like that would make the story better.
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Post by Charley on Mar 6, 2014 8:34:24 GMT -5
Criss cross
One thing that could make my book better is if Hector made a wish and it would come true so it would seem like he was magic or something And it would also be cool if Hector and his family lived somewhere magical and only hector new he had powers and if he told anybody he would get them taken away by his real parents A like his parents also ha powers but they did't know because they haven't wished for anything yet
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Post by Sydney W. on Mar 6, 2014 8:34:37 GMT -5
In the book I am reading, Between Shades of Gray, a girl named Lina follows a boy she met and spy's on him. She was trying to figure out what he was doing and why he wasn't helping the other people. I think the book would have been more exciting and interesting if Lina would have been caught spying. Then she would have had to figure out how to escape and get back to her mother and brother. That would have added more action to the book. I think that would make the book I am reading more exciting and interesting.
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Post by Sara on Mar 6, 2014 9:37:18 GMT -5
I was reading the book Everwild. The only thing I would have changed to make the story more interesting is when Milos kissed Allie and Mickey was standing there when it happened . Instead of Mickey running away and turning himself into a monster. I would of had him confront Allie and Milos when they got out of the bodes they were in.
Then if Mickey ran away after that, I could care less. But in the end I would have still of had Mickey minions capture her. His minions looked like Mr.Potato heads. Because Mickey made them look like that.
These are my changes I would have made to the story.
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Post by ryank3333 on Mar 6, 2014 10:54:23 GMT -5
If I could change a book or add more details to it. I would change Scary Stories because they need to add more pages and more characters. The stories are too short, every time I want to read more of the story I can't because the stories are like 4 pages long. Some of them are scary and some of them are not scary. I would change that so all of the story's are scary and that is what I would change about Scary Stories. If you have read the series I hope that is what you would change about Scary Stories and thanks!!!!!
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