megans3333
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Post by megans3333 on Mar 3, 2014 18:11:15 GMT -5
How I could make my book better.My book is Sage. I think it would be better if Picasso did not heal but go up and made it to the parade. Another way is for Sage and Tessa grew part but came back together at the end. One change that the author could make the book more exciting is that Sages grandma would die so it could have more sadness in the story.
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Post by Tyler W. on Mar 3, 2014 18:31:08 GMT -5
In the Rangers apprentice they didn't give Halt (Will's Craft master) many parts in the story I mean all he used Halt for was his discussions with Crowley.
So I think John Flanagan should have crammed some more things to have to do with Halt so I just think he could've used Halt more. But still I mean I've adjusted to when Halt was doing everything like fighting the Skandians, or when he almost shot Mogorath so I just think that in book five Halt could've had the main focus on him for a while. Also I would have showed Horace a bit more too because all it showed Horace doing was going over to Macindaw to help Will and Alyss.
So I just think he should've made the other characters have some action.
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Post by christian on Mar 3, 2014 18:32:38 GMT -5
How could I make the book Hatchet/ by Gary Paulsen I would change the fact that the pilot dead in the plan crash and in the book he keep reminding you about hes mom it make you sad that hes mom dos not no if he is sill alive.Describe changes the author could have included that would have made the book more exciting and interesting if he mad it more exciting before the climax it is not intriguing. So most people do not like it because in the begin it needs to get get the attestation so they wont to keep reading
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Post by jaycin3333 on Mar 3, 2014 18:48:04 GMT -5
The thing that would make my book better is that the would have more pages because when you started reading you just don't want to stop !
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Post by Colton on Mar 3, 2014 18:49:36 GMT -5
Hello today I will be talking about how I can make the book Insurgent (by Veronica Roth)better and why I would change it. I hope you enjoy my post! The book Insurgent is really good. Every part of Insurgent is awesome. I would not change one single part in the book. I wouldn't change anything because every part is so detailed and is very action packed. Whenever Tris (the main character) is about to get executed, Veronica Roth explains every detail very thoroughly. She uses very descriptive words to explain what happens. When Tobias (Tris's boyfriend) is running to save Tris, Veronica says how he is running and how the blood trickling down his ear drops strait to the floor. That is just one example. Another reason that I wouldn't change anything in the story is because when somebody hits someone, Veronica explains the sound of the hit, the person being hit and the reaction of the people watching the fight. Whenever Tobias hits his father Veronica describes the weak grunt from Tobias's father, the sound of his father cheek being punched and the reaction of the audience. That is why I wouldn't change anything in Insurgent. I hope you enjoyed it. Stay tuned for next weeks question of the week and have a wonderful day!
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Abigail P.
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Post by Abigail P. on Mar 3, 2014 18:54:36 GMT -5
I am reading Allegiant by Veronica Roth. I will be talking about how I could make the book better and more interesting. The book I am reading already has a tremendous amount of detail and I think there are very few changes I would make because it is such a good book but there is one thing that bugs me every time I pick the book up and start reading. The majority of the book is all about conflict and fighting and arguments between two incredible characters, Tris and Tobias. They have been through a lot together so I would understand why they would argue but they love each other and that should be enough to look past the problems! But in the book it is not. I would change the amount of feuds between Tris and Tobias. I don't like much romance but everything could get done so much faster and smoother if they would just get along and stop liening to each other! If Veronica would have made them not lie to each other so much everything would be easier. I get that there has to be problems but not as many as what there is in the book, almost every couple chapters they are fighting over something. I love the book but that is what I would change! I hope you enjoy my post!
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Post by Luke B. on Mar 3, 2014 19:06:32 GMT -5
Hello everybody and today I will be talking about how I could make my the book that I am reading better or more interesting by using specific details from the book. Also the that I am reading is The Watchers Lab 6 by Peter Lerangis. Well that is pretty much all I am writing about in this post. Enjoy!! How I could make the book that I am reading better or more interesting is.... in the part where Sam was hiding behind the tarp in Lab 6 when his parent where entering the room where they where holding a person locked in a room I think Sam should have got out behind the tarp and asked his parents what they doing. That would have put more drama and that would have been a good place to end the chapter to make the reader like me want to read on and on. And that is what I think what would make the book better and more interesting.
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Abigail M.
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Post by Abigail M. on Mar 3, 2014 19:19:21 GMT -5
How could you make the book better? Describe changes the author could have included that would have made the book more exciting and interesting. Please use specific details from the book to help explain changes you would make. In the book I am reading, Drama by Raina Telgemeier, Callie (main character) starts liking Jesse (other main character) but then, right before the big play West, breaks up with Bonnie, and Bonnie is suppose to kiss West as a part of the play, so Bonnie get's upset and runs to the closet, locks her self in there, and cries. Liz, and Callie try to get her out, and when it gets to her big part in the play she is no where to be seen. So, as West is waiting for Bonnie, Stage fright Jesse plays the part of Maybelle (Bonnie's part) and kisses West.
So, later Jesse asks Callie to the 8th Grade formal. And Callie is head-over-heels excited! So they go, and Jesse gets scared and runs to the bathroom. Callie waits outside the door then asks if he's in their to some random stranger. Sadly, he isn't, so Callie and Liz look all over the school for him. Jesse's brother Justin, tells Callie that he is outside. They go out there and Jesse is with West. Turns out Jesse and West are both gay, sort-a.
I would have changes that Jesse is not gay, and starts dating Callie, and they live happily ever after. This would have made the book more interesting because I think it would probably show her in the future and her through out high school, and how they made it. I would think that would be cooler because you never see books like that!
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Post by Clayton on Mar 3, 2014 19:19:49 GMT -5
The book I am reading is called Shiloh by Phyllis Reynolds Naylor. The main characters name is Marty. This is a very good book and I can only think of one thing that I would change.
The one thing that I would change would be that Marty would be more honest with his parents. In the book Marty finds a dog, Shiloh, and he doesn't tell his parents about him. He keeps it to himself and when his parents find out his mom is alright with it but his dad is not. Marty ends up getting in trouble for it. I would of liked for Marty to have told his parents and maybe they would have helped him.
Other than that I would not change anything about the book. It is a very good and exciting book. The author uses very good details and makes you want to keep reading to find out what will happen next.
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Post by Kaylee on Mar 3, 2014 19:49:20 GMT -5
I'm reading Waiting For You. I think that the author could have made the book better by having Derek cheat on Marissa with his ex girlfriend Sierra. I think if the author did that than she could of had a part in the book where Derek forgot that Marissa was coming over. So when Marissa got there than Marissa would of seen Derek in his room with Sierra. I think that would of put conflict and drama in the book. I could actually see this happening because Sierra is staring to be all flirty with Derek. Sierra is trying to get attention from him. Derek and Sierra are in a yearbook club so that means Derek gets to spend time with Sierra after school.
That's how I think my book could be better.
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Post by Seth P. on Mar 3, 2014 19:59:35 GMT -5
In the book I'm reading I.Q The White House what has recently happend is that Q's mom and Roger are having a concert at the White house and P.K (presidents kid) and chef Conrad are with eachother and malak is telling Q that P.K might be kidnapped by chef Conrad by the end of the knight.
One thing I think could make the story better is if P.K is held hostage and the president would have to do or give something to the kidnappers something to get P.K back and I think that would make the story better and more exciting.
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Post by China on Mar 3, 2014 20:07:15 GMT -5
I am reading Dragons of Spring Dawning and the only way to make it better is to bring back Sturm. Sturm was killed by the dragon highlord and a blue dragon. The dragon highlord Kitiara threw a spear penetrating Sturm's armor straight through his heart. His death was fast so he didn't suffer long.
Sturm was a noble Knight of Solamnia and his only dream was to restore the honor of the knighthood. He was admired by all of his friends and he admired all of them. When he was with his friends he soon wanted to stay with them and make sure they were safe throughout their quest.
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Post by Jersey on Mar 3, 2014 20:15:52 GMT -5
I could make The Wit And Wisdom of Baseball interesting by keeping on the same topic not just going from one thing to the next thing. The author could of talked about more baseball players. He just keep going back and forth about other baseball players. He could of talked more about the same baseball players. He could talked more about Jackie Robinsen and Babe Ruth. He could of talked more about where baseball was born. He could of made more sense about some things.
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Post by Kyleigh on Mar 3, 2014 20:33:50 GMT -5
I'm reading 13 Treasures by Michelle Harrison, if I could change anything about the book I'm reading I would add a couple of things and change things. The part I would add things to would be when Tanya has to decided if she should see her family again. But Red gives her a list of things she has to do before she sees her family. I would add what was on the list, and if it was hard for Tanya or if it was easy Tanya.
Another thing I would change would be if she didn't get to see her family. If she didn't get to see her family she would be stuck in fairy world. How would it be for Tanya? It would be more interesting if her parents were fairies at one point in time and changed back into humans. Well that's what I would change about my book, what would you change?
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Post by Gavin on Mar 3, 2014 20:57:21 GMT -5
I am reading the book Watchers I.D. One way I would make the book better is make the book at the beginning it is a little confusing. It was like in the hospital they were talking about how someone gone. Then how they needed to call the same number like the others. There was also a girl in the waiting room who knew the main characters name Eve. So the start was kind of weird and confusing.
Another way I would make the book better is by giving a little more details at the beginning because I'm at the middle of I.D and I'm starting to figure all the stuff out. Most of the beginning you just keep reading trying to figure out something about the book. Like what about the same number or why she keeps seeing something in a lot of the girls that she is seeing. Some like at the ski resort or on the internet.
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